The diagrams below show changes in Happy Valley Shopping Centre in 1982 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The picture illustrates the differences in Happy Valley Shopping Center between 1982 and 2012.

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it is clear that

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the mall has expanded in total thanks to the expansion and moving of

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furniture retail and a parking lot

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the deforestation of some areas.

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with, it is noticeable that the lake has been replaced with a newly introduced part of the mall, Furniture Retail. Just

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south of that, we can see a parking lot being replaced with a green space

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to the entrance path removal. Focusing on the interior of the shopping centre, Electronic and Sports shops have been moved from the western side to the right in front of the Elevator. In replacement, the area is dedicated to Themed Restaurants.

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, a Coffee Shop was newly built in the year 2012.

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The diagrams below show changes in Happy Valley Shopping Centre in 1982 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Detailed descriptions of crimes on newspaper and TV can have bad consequences on society, so this kind of information should be restricted on media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct, there is no reason why people should try to prevent this from extintion.