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The plans below show a student accommodation buildings 2010 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The scheme gives an overview of the changes
of
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 student accommodation building
at
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 2010 and recent
time
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times
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.
Overall
, there are several things had been changed in the structure of the building
at
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during
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this
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these
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 two periods, some
of
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apply
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notable changes are
on
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in
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 the
surrounded
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surrounding
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 gardens and the number of bedrooms
in addition
 to adding some
recreations
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recreation
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.
Firstly
,
at
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in
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 2010 the house was
surounded
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surrounded
 by gardens
in
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on
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 3 sides.
in addition
 to it
was
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containing three bedrooms two of them were at the
begining
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beginning
 and the end of the hallway,
the
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and the
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 third one was at the
north west
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northwest
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 of the main
entance
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entrance
 but it was closed at that time.
Also
, there was a
livingroom
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living room
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 with
kitchen
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a kitchen
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 and bathroom for basic needs.
Secondly
, at the recent
time
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time,
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 there are
facilitys
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facilities
have
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that have
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 been added to the apartment. two bedrooms have been added one of them is rebuilt
instead
 of the
livingtoom
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livingroom
.
Furthermore
, there is a en -suite room
have
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has
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 been built
at the end
 of the hallway with a car
parking
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park
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 outside the flat. The west garden of
main
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the main
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entance
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entrance
have
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has
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 been changed a little
due to
 the
expand
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expansion
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 of the house.
Also
, there is a social area
have
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has
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 been added to the kitchen.
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