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The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates statistics concerning how income between men and women is different in percentage in five countries over a 30-year period.
Overall
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, the percentage of
difference
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 decreased over the whole period in all countries, except Australia. It can be seen that Japan experienced the most
difference
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 in income between the
twogenders
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two genders
, with the level falling by ten per
cent
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 to 40 per
cent
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 in 2008.
Although
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 the US and the UK started at various initial percentages of
difference
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, accounting for about 34 per
cent
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 and under 30 per
cent
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 respectively in 1978, there was a similar three-decade slight decrease for both nations,
thus
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 reaching 26 per
cent
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 in 2008. Both Australia and France,
on the other hand
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, witnessed a similar number of differences, representing 20 per
cent
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 in 1978, followed by a two-decade fall. After 1998,
while
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 the percentage of
difference
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 in France continued to fall to around 18 per
cent
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, Australia had experienced the only immense increase to above 20 per
cent
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 by 2008.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words difference, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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