The older people who need employment have to compete with younger ones. What problem can this create? What are some solutions?

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It is said that the
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requirements
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employment
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competing with younger generations. The main
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for
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that
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's skills will be worsened by
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ages
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and have less flexibility than the
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youngers
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causes old
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unemployed and lack
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income. Yet it can be solved by providing more light works for aged residents.
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, the reasons why older citizens
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to compete with young
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is that young
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work more efficiently,
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and faster
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and have more flexibility than the older ones.
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is because their skills are being worse
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. Because of these, most
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nowadays are filled with young
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ranging from 18 to 36 years old.
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related
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company are recruiting more and more young
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because they
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that old
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are not as sharp and fast as younger generations,
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in a massive amount of old
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, there are solutions for
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providing more light jobs. It can be done by educating the younger generations on how to run
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business
in order to open more and more
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to reduce the unemployment rate of the old
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. By way of
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explanation
, more
companies
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means more slots for
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that
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are unemployed to have
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the opportunity
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to get a job.
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, recently, young
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people
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have come up with the idea of recruiting old
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into comedy shows or
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companies
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that produce social pranks videos because it is believed that old
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have more funny jokes,
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in a decline
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the umemployment
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umemployment
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unemployment
rate of elderly by over 50
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. Taking everything into consideration, the older generation needs to compete with younger ones in order to get employed because of their lack of
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flexibility
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writer recommends that
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the younger
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generation should be educated on how to run
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businesses
to open more
companies
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to reduce the unemployment rate of the older residents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ageism
  • Generational divide
  • Technological advancements
  • Skills gap
  • Job scarcity
  • Industry preferences
  • Pension expenditure
  • Financial planning
  • Employability
  • Retraining programs
  • Upskilling opportunities
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