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The graph below showa the average monthly change in the prices of three metas during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

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The linear graph illustrates the average monthly
change
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 in the
price
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 of
copper
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,
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nickle
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nickel
, and
zinc
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 in 2014. Calibration of data was done in percentages. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
the
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all three mental's
price
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change
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 fluctuation was
same
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the same
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 during the year
excepet
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except
 beginning, middle and end of the year. The significant
price
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diferentiation
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differentiation
 was shown by
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nickle
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. At the
beginnig
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beginning
 of the year, the
price
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change
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 of
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nickle
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nickel
 with previous months was 6% and it decreased signifinificantly to 1% in
following
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the following
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 two months. At the same duration,
copper
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 was started at 2% and fell to 0.5%. The
zinc
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was
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began at 1% and
raised
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 up to 3% and came down to 2%.
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, from March to May,
copper
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 and
zinc
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 declined minimally by 0.5% and
copper
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 statistics at -0.5%.
Subsequently
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,
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nickle
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nickel
 dipped to -3% in June and again raised to -1%.
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,
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zinc
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 value
droped
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dropped
 to -1% and again grew -0.5% in July and
at
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in
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 the same month
copper
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 was at 1%.
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, all three metals statistics remained
same
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the same
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during
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from
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 July to September.
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, both
nockle
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nickel
local
 and
zinc
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 fluctuated
same
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the same
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 from September to November.
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this
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during this
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 period, there was not a substantial
price
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change
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 for
copper
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.
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,
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nickle's
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nickel's
nickles's
 value leveled off after November. When comparing
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nickle's
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nickel's
nickles's
 value beginning and end, it
was
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dramatically declined to 1%.
Further
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,
other
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apply
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both metals
were
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did
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 not
showed
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 considerable variation
at the end
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 of the period.
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