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The graph below showa the average monthly change in the prices of three metas during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

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The linear graph illustrates the average monthly
change
 in the
price
 of
copper
,
nickle
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nickel
, and
zinc
 in 2014. Calibration of data was done in percentages. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that
the
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all three mental's
price
change
 fluctuation was
same
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the same
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 during the year
excepet
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except
 beginning, middle and end of the year. The significant
price
diferentiation
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differentiation
 was shown by
nickle
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Nickle
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. At the
beginnig
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beginning
 of the year, the
price
change
 of
nickle
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nickel
 with previous months was 6% and it decreased signifinificantly to 1% in
following
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the following
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 two months. At the same duration,
copper
 was started at 2% and fell to 0.5%. The
zinc
was
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began at 1% and
raised
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 up to 3% and came down to 2%.
However
, from March to May,
copper
 and
zinc
 declined minimally by 0.5% and
copper
 statistics at -0.5%.
Subsequently
,
nickle
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nickel
 dipped to -3% in June and again raised to -1%.
As well as
,
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zinc
 value
droped
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dropped
 to -1% and again grew -0.5% in July and
at
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in
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 the same month
copper
 was at 1%.
Then
, all three metals statistics remained
same
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the same
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during
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from
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 July to September.
Moreover
, both
nockle
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nickel
local
 and
zinc
 fluctuated
same
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the same
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 from September to November.
Next,
this
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during this
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 period, there was not a substantial
price
change
 for
copper
.
Finally
,
nickle's
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nickel's
nickles's
 value leveled off after November. When comparing
nickle's
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nickel's
nickles's
 value beginning and end, it
was
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dramatically declined to 1%.
Further
,
other
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both metals
were
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did
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 not
showed
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 considerable variation
at the end
 of the period.
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