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The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centre. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centre. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows comparisons in the evaluations of five aspects of
services
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 (and
overall
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 average) offered by three popular health
centres
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 namely
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Longston
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Langston
,
Peveril
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, and
Marchbank
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.
Services
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.
Services
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 were evaluated on a ten-point scale.
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, the marks for booking
appointments
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, doctors’
service
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 and care of children in all health
centres
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 showed greater numbers in the table,
while
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 that of response to concerns in
Peveril
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Centre
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 stood at the top. It is noteworthy that all types of
services
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 in
Peveril
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Centre
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 were assessed slightly higher than the two remaining. As noted earlier, patients stated that booking
appointments
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, doctor’s
service
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, and care of children had been far better aspects of
services
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, with the exception of booking
appointments
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 in
Longston
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Centre
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. In detail, the mark of booking
appointments
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 in
Peveril
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Centre
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 was almost excellent, with 9.1, and
this
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 was the largest point than
Marchbank
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 and
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Longston
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Langston
centres
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, amounting to 7.8 and 5.2 respectively.
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 the point of doctors’
service
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 in
Peveril
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Centre
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 was 8.7, that in
Marchbank
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 and
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Longston
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Langston
 was quite lower, with the respective figures experiencing 8.4 and 8.0. In terms of children who had taken medicine in three different
centres
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 found that
this
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 aspect of
service
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 is nearly normal, with the points showing between 5.3 and 6.3 in all
centres
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. With regards to the pharmacy, response to concerns, and
overall
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 average, the assessment of the former in
Marchbank
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Centre
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 (5.8) and
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Longston
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Langston
Centre
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 (5.1) was not as high as
Peveril
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Centre
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’s, translating into 6.3. Meanwhile, response to concerns saw an excellent point in
Peveril
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Centre
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 (9.6),
whereas
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this
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 figure in
Longston
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Centre
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 was the lowest, at 4.3, and in
Marchbank
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 was 6.5. The
overall
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 average in
Peveril
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Centre
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 was the highest, with 8.3 as expected. The average points of 7.2 and 5.8 were given to
Marchbank
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 and
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Longston
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Langston
centres
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 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words services, centres, longston, peveril, marchbank, appointments, service, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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