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different
jobs
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, they discuss the total working hours
per week
for each jobs
.
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salary
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nurses
starten
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start
three
years
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average
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hours
per week
of them. First of all, the salary
of police
when they started Correct article usage
the police
it
was 21000 Correct pronoun usage
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comraison
after Correct your spelling
comparison
three
years
will be 23000 it's become increase about
2000. Change preposition
by about
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, they working
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work 40
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per week
for 40 exactly. Secoundly
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Secondly
nurse
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nurse's
salary
when they started it
was 18000 comparison after Correct pronoun usage
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three
years
will become 19000.
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, now i
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the Change preposition
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FireFighther
and the underground Correct your spelling
FireFighter
driver
. First,
the firefighther
taked when they started 4000. Correct your spelling
firefighter
firefighters
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, after three
years
the salary
will be 41000. Moreover
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work more
hours
per week
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jobs
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Secondly
driver
when they started their salary
became 50000 also
after three
years
their salary
will be 51000. In addition
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time Correct article usage
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compared
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other jobs
jobs
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the jobs
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that
salary
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driver
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firefighter
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firefighters
work
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more Fix the agreement mistake
many
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is less
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the underground
underground
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the underground
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drivers
driver
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drivers
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