The chart above shows informaition about various professions in the UK. and salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession

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This

shows chart below

give

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some details about salaries for

differents

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different

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jobs

Also

, they discuss the total working

hours

per

week

for each

jobs

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job

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. On the one hand, I will discuss now the

salary

for police and

nurse

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when they

starten

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start

and after

three

years

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will show

average

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working

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hours

per

week

of them. First of all, the

salary

police

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when they started

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was 21000

comraison

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comparison

after

three

years

will be 23000 it's become increase

about

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2000.

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, they

working

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week

for 40 exactly.

Secoundly

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Secondly

, the

nurse

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salary

when they started

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was 18000 comparison after

three

years

will become 19000.

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will discuss the salaries and the time they

work

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the

FireFighther

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FireFighter

and the underground

driver

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the

firefighther

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firefighter

firefighters

taked when they started 4000.

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, after

three

years

the

salary

will be 41000.

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, they

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week

for 55 they

work

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jobs

Secound

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, underground

driver

when they started their

salary

became 50000

also

after

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years

their

salary

will be 51000.

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work

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comparison

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with

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jobs

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, we see the higher one of

jobs

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the jobs

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who

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take a high

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the underground

driver

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the

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firefighter

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work

much

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hours

but their

salary

less

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than

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words jobs, hours, week, salary, three, years, work, driver with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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8Word repetition
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4 paragraphs

226 words

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