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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The given graph illustrates data of the proportion of inhabitants in 4 countries in Asia (Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia) analyzed from 1970 until 2020 and the number expected of population from 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, an upward trend can be noticed in the 4 nations analyzed from the start of the report in 1970, experiencing minor fluctuations throughout the years. To start, Malaysia has
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 higher percentage of
population
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 living in cities starting at 30% in 1970
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 to reach over 80% by 2040.
In contrast
, Thailand has the lowest percentage of inhabitants rising from under 20% and
mantaining
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maintaining
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steady growth reaching a point of just over 50% in 2040.
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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doubles
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 the proportion of
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the population
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 from Indonesia in 1970 with 30%
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 15% respectively.
However
, when comparing both countries, a notable change can be seen with Indonesia surpassing
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the Philippines
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, both reaching 60% and 50% in each country.
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