Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of ​both approaches. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A number of individuals argue that high

school

graduates have to travel or obtain an occupation for a period of time rather than going directly to

study

at university. From my viewpoint, It can lead to

a

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positive development

such

as broadening horizons and enhancing your personal growth earlier.

However

, there are

also

the

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drawbacks,

such

as

delay

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delays

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in getting a formal education, and

risk

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the risk

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of losing academic motivation.

To begin

with,

taking

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making

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decision

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the decision

a decision

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to

work

after

graduated

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from high

school

is not a terrible

decision

. If you have decided to take the occupation since graduating from high

school

, you will be exposed to the professional field.

Therefore

, it can broaden your horizons

especially

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in the workplace field.

Moreover

, since you have been getting older, it can build your personal growth

such

as being confident to confront challenges and surviving independently.

For instance

, my friend decided to take the job after

graduated

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from high

school

.

Then

,

currently

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she has more

work

experience than me. After she can survive

by

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her own money, she

decided

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to continue her

study

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studies

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again with her own money.

However

, there are

also

drawbacks if you decide to delay your

study

.

Firstly

, your formal education will be delayed.

For instance

, you can finish your

study

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studies

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in

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with

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a

Bachelor

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degree or diploma

in

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at

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the

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age

that is

not should

be

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.

In addition

, if you have enjoyed your

work

, your academic motivation tends to be lower because you have so many tasks in your

work

. As an illustration, there are some people who did not finish their studies because of their business in their office.

To sum up

, both the

decision

of taking

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the occupation first after graduating from high

school

and delaying your

study

to higher education

have

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positive and negative sides.

Therefore

, you have to consider it carefully before making the

decision

.