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Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world today.in some countries the use of alternative source of energy is replacing fossil fuels. Is this a positive or negative developments?

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It is irrefutable that, in
this
 modern era fossil
fuels
 play an essential role
for
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 providing
energy
 to the whole world. But in many
nations
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people
 started giving priority to
the
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renewable sources of
energy
instead
 of fossil
fuels
.
Let
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 discuss the topic
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that
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whether
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 using
alternative
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an alternative
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source
 of
energy
 have a positive or negative development in the upcoming paragraphs. To dive
in to
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 the topic, there are numerous positive
impact
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impacts
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 of using renewable
energy
. First and foremost is that , as fossil
fuels
 are available in
a
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limited quantity and excessive usage of fossil fuel can result as finished for future
generation
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generations
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 by using renewable
energy
people
cab
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can
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 preserve
the
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fossil
fuel
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fuels
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 for the upcoming generations.
Moreover
,
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alternative
source
 of
energy
 helps to reduce
the
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global warming as
it
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they
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 do not create pollution. Which is
also
 beneficial for
people
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 health and making
fresh
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a fresh
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 environment. Turning to the flip side of the coin, there are few negative developments occur
of
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in
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 using
alternative
source
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sources
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 of
energy
 .
Firstly
, creating renewable
source
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sources
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 of
energy
 plants is very expensive so everyone cannot afford it.
For example
, installing solar panels in
the
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homes
are cost
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costs
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 a lot which
people
 with normal wages cannot afford
it
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.
Further
, installing
alternative
source
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sources
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 of
energy
 plants
cab
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can be
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 harmful
for
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to
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 the
animals
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animal's
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life
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lives
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 it may
kill
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 by it. Like, when wind turbines are running and birds
interacted
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interact
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with it
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it
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them
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. Which will harm them.
To
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the
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conclusion, renewable sources of
energy
is
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 the best way of
transited
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transiting
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 fossil fuel and
it
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they
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 will
also
 work as
substitute
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of
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for
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 fossil
fuels
.
Addition
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, everyone should try to use
the
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alternative
energy
 it will
helps
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 to save
environment
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the environment
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 because it
do
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does
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 not
emits
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green
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house gases. Which
results
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 less global warming and it will
also
helps
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 to create more employment for
people
.
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