Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period  of time instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and  disadvantages of ​both approaches. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant  examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There has been an argument about whether teenagers who graduated from high
school
should go to study
university
right away, or should they go for a
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journey
or have some working some experiences. Some say that having some life
experience
that can not gain from
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school
before
colleage
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college
is
importent
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important
,
while
others say it is better to go to
university
directly. First and foremost, 19-year-old is the age that young adults just
gratuated
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graduated
from
the
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high
school
, and it is
also
the perfect age to explore the
world
without any burdens. In my country, most
of
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student
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the student
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will choose to go to
the
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university
right after high
school
,
then
after finishing
the
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university
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university,
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they will just go to work
,
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and never have the
chance
to go
for
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on
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a journey
becaue
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because
they have too many
things
to worry about
such
as
parients
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parents
, works and kids. So 19-year-old is a lot of people's only
chance
to
experience
the
world
in a very different way.
Secondly
, it is better to have some personal
experience
that learn outside the
school
. Most high
school
graduates have no knowledge that learn outside the
school
, and it is better to have some
experience
that can only get through working or
teaveling
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travelling
. A lot of
things
school
cannot teach, only by learning from life
experience
individuals can grow up faster.
On the other hand
, some
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teenagers
may not
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enough to go traveling or working. A lot of times, teenagers are still not ready to face the
world
, they need more time and knowledge
that
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than
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can get from the
school
or their parents. If they run into trouble that they are not able to handle , it may
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cause
a serious issue.
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Moreover
,
university
usually
require
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the knowledge that students learn from high
school
, if they are not going to
university
directly, they may forget some of the
things
they learned. As
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a result
, they may have
hard
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time knowing what
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said
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,
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and may have
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graeter
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greater
chance
to fail
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their
colleage
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college
lessons.
To sum up
, high
school
graduates have the perfect age to go
traveling
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travelling
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and
experience
the
world
, and learn
things
that
school
will not teach.
However
, during
traveling
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or working they may
incounter
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encounter
some danger they cannot handle
,
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and may have
a
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chance
to forget what they learn from
the
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school
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • gap period
  • experience
  • personal growth
  • informed
  • career choices
  • formal education
  • academic motivation
  • transitioning
  • continuity
  • structured learning
  • academic resources
  • specialization
  • real-world experience
  • financial burden
  • exploration
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