The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.

The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.
The above pie chart showcases the US citizens' spending
habit
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different commodities in 1966. It indirectly demonstrates how the 1966 American lifestyle is through
manifasting
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manifesting
the money allocation in different items. The
overall
spent distribution is indicated as
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: In 1966,
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consumption
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made in food which contributed to 44% of the
overall
spending; Cars and furniture followed, contributing to
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second and
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third place correspondingly; Meanwhile, Petrol, restaurants and books constituted 1
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less than each
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towards the whole in expenditure respectively after furniture cost;
Last
but not least, American conserved most money on computers, leading it to be 1% annually and became the lowest out of all. By looking into the above data, we can identify a phenomenon that most
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in 1966 might prefer dining at home
instead
of visiting restaurants when the petrol and restaurant
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expenditures
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were comparatively less than that of food.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • budget
  • housing
  • transportation
  • food and drinks
  • healthcare
  • education
  • categories
  • percentage
  • financial burden
  • prioritize
  • mobility
  • services
  • sprawling
  • indulging
  • culinary experiences
  • groceries
  • importance
  • coverage
  • allocation
  • miscellaneous expenses
  • entertainment
  • personal care
  • leisure activities
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