IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
#show #migration #uk #information #features #comparisons
The above two pie charts demonstrate the factors that England immigrants and
emmigrants
Correct your spelling
immigrants
emigrants
 considered in 2007. The % that those factors constituted enables us to observe the corresponding mobility patterns. Interestingly, definite
job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
show examples
 played
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 major role in both immigration and emigration decisions, sharing
similar
Correct article usage
a similar
show examples
 proportion among the two categories.
Nonetheless
, variation showed on the bottom of the list: people entered Britain
wihtout
Correct your spelling
without
 stating any reason was least possible in 2007;
whereas
, only 4% of emigrants left Britain for
further
 study, making it the lowest out of all. Summarizing from the charts, a phenomenon stands out which definite job was the dominating consideration in 2007 England's mobility. At the same time, the UK's educational institutions attracted both
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
local citizens and foreign students, making it the second top reason for immigration and the least considered for emigration.
Submitted by ardentpicks on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: