The chart below gives information about how many Europeans citizens of different age groups who frequently went to gym. between 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how many Europeans citizens of different age groups who frequently went to gym. between 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph above illustrates
that
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the changing proportion
ofEuropean
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of European
inhabitants who hit the track recurrently in terms of 4 age
group
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groups
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and over from 1990 to 2010
Overall
, It is noticeable that there is approximately no change at
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around
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5% between 1990 and 1994 for the numbers of
elder
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an elder
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generation who aged 34-43 and 44-53. and
then
undergo-demostrate
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undergo-demonstrate
undergo-demonstrated
slightly
grows
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before 1998. After 1998, vet, the figures for
who
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aged 34-43 moderately
increases
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up to 10%
while
that the figure for
eldest
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the eldest
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group
stays the same.
Furthermore
,
it is clear that
the young people going to
gym
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the gym
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oftentimes including 18-23 and 24-33
ages
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age
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show
similar
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a similar
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pattern at around 15%-25% with the latter one
increase
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dramatically until 2006.
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, the latter
one
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is caught up
during
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2002 to 2006. In the
last
four
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years
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year
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years
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, the figure for the youngest
group
suddenly
plummet
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plummeted
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to under 20%
while
the other
group
increases
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increased
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continuously and
finally
peaking
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peaked at
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around 25%. To summarize, the European residents engage in physical activity habitually in the 4 type ages all present the tendency to rise in whole except the eldest.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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