You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The graph illustrates how many people of different gender are working in different types of jobs in Australia in the past year.
Overall
, it is evident that the majority of disciplines are dominated by men and the gap between genders is dramatic.
Although
the majority of job positions are taken by men, there are two niches where the amount of female workers employed is bigger. These are the professionals and the clerical, which happens to be
also
the biggest category for women. In terms of men, the biggest employer is the tradespeople sector,
similarly
with the production. In these two the gap between male and female employees is the most significant with the difference of 450 thousand workers.
In addition
, a similar difference is found in the manager roles. The rest of the categories
such
as labourers and semi-professionals had smaller gaps between genders
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but were still dominated by male workers.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employed persons
  • job type
  • sex
  • employment figures
  • gender distribution
  • full-time
  • part-time
  • casual
  • professionals
  • managers
  • technicians
  • service workers
  • clerical staff
  • laborers
  • skilled trades
  • predominantly
  • discrepancy
  • proportionally
  • sectors
  • industries
  • dominance
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