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the pie charts bleow show the comparisob of different kinds of energy production of france in two years

the pie charts bleow show the comparisob of different kinds of energy production of france in two years
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The pie chart elaborates
the
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on the
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 confrontations of
variety
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a variety
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types
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of types
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 of
energy
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production
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of
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in
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 France between 1995 to 2005.
Overall
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, the most enormous changes
of
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in
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energy
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 output have been
the
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in the
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 petrol sector. In all types of
energy
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production
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production,
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 there was only minimal change over the
10 year
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10-year
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 period. First of all, the figure
of
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for
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 gas and coal started below three in ten, but it reached
accurately
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apply
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30 % in 2005. The first
number of
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apply
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production
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 of petrol approximately was 29 %,
next
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the next
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years
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year
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 it decreased markedly, fell by 10 % and
has been
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was
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 at below a fifth until 2005.
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, the output line of other sectors grew since 2005 ,
while
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 its number commenced at below 10%, it has been
thrieved
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thrived
 within a short period of time.
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, the figure
of
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for
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 nuclear
energy
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 was less than ten
percent
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per cent
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 and the number rose rapidly next years and
eventually
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eventually,
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this
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energy
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production
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 was 10.10% in 2005
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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