Developing the economy will always damage the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that
the
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economic
growth
always leads
detrimental
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to detrimental
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effect
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on our natural habitat.
While
it has been generally true for the
last
two or three centuries, the emergence of sustainable
development
has changed the game. The previous
growth
model
involves
relentless
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exploitation of
the
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natural resources. Today's approach,
on the other hand
, facilitates the means and tools to preserve the
Earth
. From
early
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years of the "Industrial Revolution" up to 50 years ago, humans have proudly, and yet naively, consumed natural resources and polluted the
Earth
. Early engineers and thinkers believed that the planet is so vast that it can easily absorb our polluting leftovers.
Although
it is true
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a small scale, it has shown the opposite for mass
production
. Humans' activities have polluted clean water resources, air, and the
Earth
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soil, in exchange for more profit.
For instance
, the
production
of jean trousers consumes thousands of gallons of clean water and produces the same amount of sewage, which is poured back
to
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the flow. So, in the old definition of
development
, more
production
means more deterioration. As humans
got
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aware
about
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their actions'
outcome
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outcomes
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, they changed their
growth
model
into a sustainable one. A sustainable
model
facilitates means, protocols, and tools to minimize threats to the environment, and simultaneously
the
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maintaining
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the
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production
. Take
textile
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industry as an example. The new methods of producing materials and processes, which consumes much less water and produces much less sewage, are the
engineers
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engineer's
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and scientist
endeavor
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and contribution to
preserve
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the
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nature.
Although
many sustainable processes are harder to implement or more expensive, a growing number of companies are embracing them. So, I believe that as we
are going
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forward in
the
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history, economic
growth
is getting less equivalent to damage to
the
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nature.
To conclude
, it is essential to understand
that
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which
model
of progress are we discussing
about
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. The former
model
of
development
has constantly exploited and
destructed
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the environment,
while
the contemporary notion of
development
tries to preserve the
Earth
.
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