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The world's governments and organizations confront a multitude of global problems. Which do you think is the most pressing problem for the inhabitants of our planet and give the solution?

The impact of global problems has sparked major controversy in society.
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 some people believe that the solution to global warming might bring several advantages, others claim that the opposite holds true.
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 essay will elaborate on both sides of the debate and
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 lead to a logical conclusion.
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there are numerous reasons why the solution to global warming might bring several advantages, but the most important one stems from the fact that
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 problem will play a vital role for governments and
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. As a matter of fact, crops and other plants growing better will offer tons of benefits to
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 climate and beautiful nature.
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 a recent study at Sydney University, the temperature of
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 and habitats will greatly contribute to saving energy
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house
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 and reducing pollution.
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, some people adopt an opposing view and tend to believe that the opposite holds true. It is largely attributed to the fact that global warming may have a negative
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 on changing weather irregular and threats to biodiversity. To be more precise, the disadvantages of wild animals might be
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a harsh
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 living environment and food.
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, the downsides of deforestation damaging animals and causing a social
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 are critical. In conclusion,
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 there are strong arguments on both sides of the debate, I strongly believe that the solution to global warming might bring several advantages.

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State a clear view on the most press issue first and give a simple plan to solve it.
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Use simple linking words to connect ideas, and keep one idea per paragraph.
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The essay uses some link words like First and Nevertheless.
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It shows an attempt to discuss both sides.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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