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company should launch 5G service in your area, give your opinion

#company #g #service #area
The topic
5
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G technology has sparked
the
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recent debate and controversy.I opine that our City must launch 5g connection
due to
 which numerous people will find the
employement
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employment
.
Apperently
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Apparently
,it improves the
internet
 service.
To begin
 with,the rate of
unemployement
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unemployment
 is dramatically increasing
due to
 not enough opportunities in our area.Adopting
to
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5g technology will help the younger
genertaion
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generation
 to focus more on online Startups.
Besides
 , it
also
 improves the economic conditions of the City.
For instance
,
Citiess
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Cities
 like China moved to the fast
internet
 5 years ago .It was said that around 50,000 new startup
business
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businesses
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 are established by the youngsters in that area to
the
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ease
the
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their
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life
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lives
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. Currently,
Employee's
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Employee
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 in the Revenue,
Muncipal
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Municipal
 offices are tired of working with
the
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poor
internet
 connection.The work that has to be done in 2 days is taking ages
due to
 ineffective Service.The new technology not only improves the
internet
 speed it
also
 improves the quality of the work.
To conclude
, in
this
fast growing
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world
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 everyone has to incorporate new technologies to compete
the
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 world.
However
, the cost
also
 might increase but the advantages
overcomes
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 the cost.
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