Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to success in their career, while others argue that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both view and give your opinion.
In today's world, it is important to have a
good paying
job. In order, to land up on a Add a hyphen
good-paying
top end
job, Add a hyphen
top-end
people
must complete their university or college degree
to have a successfull
Correct your spelling
successful
career
. While
other thinks
that, students should start working on their Correct subject-verb agreement
think
desire
field just after completing Replace the word
desired
their
Correct pronoun usage
apply
school
. In this
essay, we will be discussing both of the view
, and in the Change to a plural noun
views
end
Add a comma
end,
i
will be giving out my personal opinion about the topic.
On one side, Change the capitalization
I
Children's
must complete their Change noun form
Children
degree
, because universities gives
broader knowledge for whatever field Change the verb form
give
you
are Correct pronoun usage
they
persuing
, even though it can be comparatively expensive to graduate from Correct your spelling
pursuing
universities
. Fix the agreement mistake
university
As most
of the top companies, Correct word choice
Most
they
look for experience on your resume, but recruiters most importantly focus on the field of study, so having a college Correct pronoun usage
apply
degree
is a plus point to land up on
something good in your Change preposition
apply
career
. While
on degree
courses, college faculty will be giving out team
assignment
and divide the entire classroom into groups to complete the tasks, so Fix the agreement mistake
assignments
this
team
working skill will help people
to work in team
and co-operate with their co-workers.
Fix the agreement mistake
teams
Whereas
, starting a career
just after school
can be beneficial as well,
because Remove the comma
apply
school's
in Change noun form
schools
this
modern society have variety
of extra-curriculum activities Add an article
a variety
in
which they teach you to deal with Change preposition
apply
real
world. Brain maturity comes at different Add an article
the real
time
to different Fix the agreement mistake
times
people
, so starting early can be challenging but most of the kids they
deal with it and achieve success Correct pronoun usage
apply
in
Change preposition
at
their
early age. Change the word
an
Their
are companies in the market Replace the word
There
who
Correct pronoun usage
that
hires
kids directly from Correct subject-verb agreement
hire
school
, so by the time they would
have completed their Verb problem
apply
degree
, one
can have Correct pronoun usage
they
real time
experience working in the market.
In my opinion, children should complete their higher studies in order to get a good Add a hyphen
real-time
career
, as majority
of Add an article
the majority
a majority
people
they
don't have specific knowledge about how Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
world work
. So, having a Change the verb form
works
degree
will give a
plus point in Correct pronoun usage
me a
career
, and Correct pronoun usage
my career
have
a good experience of working with Verb problem
give me
the
Correct article usage
a
team
with full of
Change preposition
apply
confident
.Replace the word
confidence
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