Some people today believe that it is acceptable to use physical force to discipline children, but others feel it is completely unacceptable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is irrefutable that,
children's
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children
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are the future of the nation.
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that their growth and behaviour always
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to
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society and parents. Regarding
this
, it
is often argue
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that for teaching
discipline
to the
children
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children,
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folks should use physical
punishment
.
Although
many people
believes
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that physical
punishment
is not the appropriate way to
teaching
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discipline
children
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.
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discuss the topic in the upcoming paragraphs. To dive
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the topic, there are several reasons
of
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supporting the notion of using physical force to
discipline
children
.
Firstly
, sometimes youngsters challenge or test
the
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parental
exceptation
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expectation
expectations
exception
and authority towards them. Which cannot
be resolve
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without giving them
punishment
.
Moreover
, giving mild physical
punishment
can easily teach them what is acceptable or unacceptable and right and
wron
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wrong
it may
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instant improvement in their behaviour. Turning to the other side, some
holds
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notion
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the notion
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that using physical
punishment
for teaching
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to teach
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discipline
child is completely unacceptable because if people continuously give them physical
punishment
young ones can be habitual of them and act
like
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apply
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a
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stubborn in future as they will not care about it.
Further
, sometimes using physical
punishment
may not
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desirable results and even give damaging consequences. To illustrate, giving too much corporal
punishment
will lead little ones to misbehave and conduct
crime
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and so on.
To
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the
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conclusion, pondering both
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opinion
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I opine that
,
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discipline
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disciplining
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children
is the biggest challenge for
the
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parents and
teacher
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teachers
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their
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are many situations
happen
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that happen
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where people have to use physical force
for correcting
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to correct
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the
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mistakes
than
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then
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it should be all right. But it is necessary for
children
need
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to be accountable for their own behaviour in order to learn
the
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inner control and
being
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a good person. Parents should always try to solve the problems politely
and
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understand the
child
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child's
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situation and choose physical force as the
last
option for
discipline
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disciplining
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them.
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