The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.
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The table illustrates and predicts the changes in population numbers of individuals aged 65 and older in three
countries
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Canada
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,
Germany
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and
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UK
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the UK
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in 1988,
2000
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and 2000
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and
estimated
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the estimated
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percentage in 2030.
Overall
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, the population in all
countries
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had
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increased and is predicted to rise. The
countries
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with the highest and the lowest
population
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populations
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will remain unchanged. Between 1988 and 2000,
Germany
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and
Canada
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had increased the same amount which was 4%.
On the other hand
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, the
UK
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had only a slight increase
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in
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their rating which was not close to 1%.
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, by
year
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the year
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2000,
Germany
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and
Canada
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was
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were
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the highest
ranging
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ranking
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at 25.32% and 20.67% respectively,
whereas
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, the
UK
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had 14.89 and was the lowest. By 2030, the ranking of the
countries
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are
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is
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predicted to stay the same,
however
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, the
UK
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is expected to climb at
the
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a
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similar percentage
of
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to
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Canada
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and
Germany
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. The percentage of increase will be at 6% among all the three
countries
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, canada, germany, uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage change
  • population
  • aged 65 and above
  • information
  • table
  • data
  • trends
  • patterns
  • comparison
  • predicted
  • future
  • findings
  • comment
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