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The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The report devices from a bar chart that illustrates the teaching
time
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 spent by each teacher in a variety of countries in 2001.
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, the allocation of
time
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 to teach in the USA and Iceland exceeded that of the other countries throughout all educational levels.
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, it is noteworthy that the duration of
time
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 spent in the United States was the greatest.
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, Japan and Spain exhibited comparable figures across all levels of education, with approximately 600
hours
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 dedicated to classroom instruction.
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, Spanish educational institutions tended to allocate an additional 400
hours
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 to upper secondary education.
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, in the case of Iceland, elementary
schools
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 had similarities to those found in Japan and Spain, and there was a significant difference
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 both lower and upper secondary
schools
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, which conducted
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 activity for approximately 800
hours
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.
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, lower and upper secondary
schools
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 in the USA nearly doubled the teaching
time
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 compared to other nations, with roughly 1100
hours
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 of instruction, and primary
schools
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 typically have a reduced number of classroom
hours
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, with approximately 300 fewer
hours
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 allocated for instruction.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, hours, schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual hours of teaching
  • teaching workload
  • educational systems
  • teacher-student ratio
  • significantly
  • slightly
  • noticeably
  • gap
  • highest/lowest number of hours
  • compare
  • contrast
  • reflect
  • variations
  • distribution of teaching hours
  • average
  • respectively
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