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The pie charts show the main reason for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The pie charts show the main reason for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The pie charts display the major purpose for the immigration and emigration of people in
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UK
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the UK
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 in 2007.
Overall
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,it is evident from the diagrams that the main reason people travelled in and out of
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UK
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the UK
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 was for Definite Jobs
while
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 a minority was for no reasons or other reasons.
To begin
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 with, A similar percentage was recorded for Definite Jobs in both diagrams at nearly 30% and there was a similar pattern with going to accompany others at almost 16%.
However
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,there were more individuals who left than those
travelled
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who travelled
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 to
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UK
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the UK
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 for no reason at 6% and 18% respectively.
Furthermore
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,a significant proportion of 26% travelled to London for Formal studies which was higher than the value for those who left at 4%.
In addition
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,there was a high difference between those who went to
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UK
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the UK
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 in search of work and other reasons when compared to those who travelled out of the country, with the figure
of
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for
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 emigration
surpeceding
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superseding
 that
of
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for
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 immigration.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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