In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
People
are moving from Use synonyms
countryside
to Correct article usage
the countryside
cities
and Use synonyms
population
in rural Correct article usage
the population
areas
Use synonyms
are
decreasing recently and many countries facing Wrong verb form
has been
with
Change preposition
apply
this
trend. I think Linking Words
this
action has lots of positive outcomes from society and sustainability aspects, Linking Words
however
, it Linking Words
also
has some drawbacks.
On the one hand, Linking Words
goverments
mostly make investments Correct your spelling
governments
government
to
the Change preposition
in
cities
rather than rural Use synonyms
areas
Use synonyms
especially
in education and transportation systems. In term of education, Add the comma(s)
, especially
Correct article usage
the countrysides
countrysides
have Fix the agreement mistake
countryside
less school
than Fix the agreement mistake
fewer schools
cities
and Use synonyms
also
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this
locations lack Correct determiner usage
these
of from
private courses Change preposition
apply
which
Change preposition
in which
people
gain different skills to help them Use synonyms
for finding
job. When Wrong verb form
find
people
move to Use synonyms
cities
, they can easily reach Use synonyms
these kind
of resources to improve themselves and build Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
Correct article usage
a succesfull
succesfull
career. Correct your spelling
successful
Furthermore
, Linking Words
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this
personal developments Correct determiner usage
these
Use synonyms
increases
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increase
quality
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the quality
in
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of
workforce
which Add an article
the workforce
a workforce
drive
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drives
country’s
economy to Correct article usage
the country’s
better
place. Correct article usage
a better
Also
, Linking Words
cities
have more Use synonyms
advance
public transportation systems and when Replace the word
advanced
people
move to Use synonyms
cities
, they use more public transport rather than their personal cars. Use synonyms
This
resulted in less Linking Words
carbondioxide relaise
to Correct your spelling
carbon dioxide released
atmosphere
and Add an article
the atmosphere
more
sustainable future for Correct article usage
a more
world
.
Add an article
the world
On the other hand
, rural Linking Words
areas
are Use synonyms
main
Correct article usage
the main
areas
for farming and countries feed their population from those Use synonyms
areas
. When Use synonyms
people
Use synonyms
left
these locations, it is hard to find Wrong verb form
leave
people
who work in those Use synonyms
areas
. Because of Use synonyms
this
, companies start to Linking Words
inport
foods from Correct your spelling
import
the
other countries and Correct article usage
apply
this
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increases
food prices Use synonyms
in
all around the country. From another perspective, Change preposition
apply
cities
are expensive places and Use synonyms
people
can Use synonyms
be face
with harder conditions Change the verb form
be faced
such
as higher rent and Linking Words
lack
of Correct article usage
a lack
supportive
community. But, these Correct article usage
a supportive
people
should feed their children and pay their bills when they start to live in Use synonyms
city
. Because of these, they can commit Add an article
the city
a city
crime
and Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
this
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increases
Use synonyms
crime
rate.
In conclusion, population Add an article
the crime
increases
in Use synonyms
cities
with moving from Use synonyms
other part
of the country have some benefits but Change the wording
another part
other parts
also
it has detrimental effects that can Linking Words
effect
Correct your spelling
affect
the
city life.Correct article usage
apply
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