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Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email, recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn explain how your friend could learn this sport suggest that you both learn this sport together Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your email as follows: Dear .........................,

#friend #lives #town #advice #sport #email #addresses
Dear Rohit, Hope you are well. I'm writing
this
 since you've asked for a suggestion for learning a new sport. I think you're an outgoing person, so
cricket
 will suit you.
Also
, it needs a person who can stay on the field for at least four hours, which I believe you can do because I know your stamina is much better than mine. There are multiple
cricket
 grounds in Australia where you can easily start beginner training. In fact, I've heard that your government
also
 provides basic training in
cricket
 on some grounds; you can check on their website. Plus, I'm coming to Australia next month for a year so we can both learn
cricket
 together; what's your take on
this
? And since I know the basics of
cricket
, I can help you learn it easily. I think it will be fun to learn a new sport together.  Hoping to see you soon. Best Regards, Jaskaran
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