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The given picture presents the water cycle which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the planet Earth.

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The given picture presents the
water
 cycle which is the continuous movement of
water
 on, above and below the surface of the planet Earth.
This
 natural process
also
 known as the
water
 cycle is continued every day if not every hour,
consequently
 humans get to swim in
water
 reservoirs
such
 as lakes, oceans and rivers,
water
 their crops by rain and so on. When the process called evaporation happens the
water
 vapour, 80% of which is contributed by
ocean
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the ocean
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, the clouds are formed,
then
 they
precipite
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precipitate
precipice
, covering
the
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apply
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certain areas of the Earth with
rain drops
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raindrops
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as a result
 lakes are filled with more and more
water
.
Likewise
, the collected raindrops on mounts create snow.
Usually
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 there are surface runoffs under the mountains, those runoffs or groundwater run through the ground and come out as rivers to fill the ocean.
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