The chart below introduces us the process of brick production for the building industry.

The chart below introduces us
the
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process of
brick
production for the building industry.
Brick
is
man-made
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thing
,
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because it”
s
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's
made by people.There are seven steps of
brick
production.It starts from the digging and finishes with delivery to companies or corporations. At
the
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first,the
clay
is dug by
digger
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a digger
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,
after
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the extracted
clay
is gone through
metal
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the metal
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grid.Milled
clay
is
mixing
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with sand and water.
After
this
, we pass the mixture through
wire
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cutter,which turns
this
clay
into
brick
.
The next step is
to
making
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brick
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stronger.
Brick
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needs to be dried for 24-40 hours,
then
the bricks are immersed in the kiln,
firstly
in low heat,
then
in high heat, the temperature inside can reach from 900 to 1300 degrees
celcius
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celsius
.
Finally
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when bricks are ready, the main task is to pack them and send
to
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the customer.
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this
is how
brick
is made,
that
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is considered an integral material in the construction of any building. In conclusion,
i
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want
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say that everyone should know that even one worthless
brick
does not appear out of nowhere, it appears with massive labor.
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