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The chart below introduces us the process of brick production for the building industry.

#process #brick #production #industry
The chart below introduces us
the
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 process of
brick
 production for the building industry.
Brick
 is
man-made
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 thing
,
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because it”
s
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's
 made by people.There are seven steps of
brick
 production.It starts from the digging and finishes with delivery to companies or corporations. At
the
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first,the
clay
 is dug by
digger
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a digger
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,
after
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and after
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 the extracted
clay
 is gone through
metal
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the metal
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 grid.Milled
clay
 is
mixing
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 with sand and water.
After
this
, we pass the mixture through
wire
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 cutter,which turns
this
clay
 into
brick
.
The next step is
 to
making
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brick
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 stronger.
Brick
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 needs to be dried for 24-40 hours,
then
 the bricks are immersed in the kiln,
firstly
 in low heat,
then
 in high heat, the temperature inside can reach from 900 to 1300 degrees
celcius
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celsius
.
Finally
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 when bricks are ready, the main task is to pack them and send
to
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them to
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 the customer.
So
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this
 is how
brick
 is made,
that
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which
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 is considered an integral material in the construction of any building. In conclusion,
i
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want
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 say that everyone should know that even one worthless
brick
 does not appear out of nowhere, it appears with massive labor.
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