The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.
The pie charts illustrate, the youngster’s pastime activities based on a survey report.
Overall
, it is evident that male children spend more amount of time
on sports and computer games
, conversely
, female children devote themselves more on
activities like dancing and reading. Change preposition
to
However
, listening to music gets equal
Correct article usage
an equal
percentile
of Replace the word
percentage
time
for both genders.
In terms of male juniors’ participation in sports events, noticeably they spend more than a
half of their free Correct article usage
apply
time
behind different games
like Basketball, soccer and skateboarding costing 26%, 17% and 11%, of the total share of time
. Similarly
, they also
use more than one third
portion of their Add a hyphen
one-third
time
playing computer games
. Strikingly, they spend negligible amount of time
on reading.
Conversely
, female juniors’
use a significant portion of their Change noun form
juniors
time
on dancing and reading books with 27% and 21%, respectively. Moreover
, they spend less than a half percentile of time
playing computer games
which is 16% than that of the males.Submitted by asifiqbal1264 on
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