The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph

shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
Those 2 graphs reveal information about the number of British tourists and
visitors
in 2 decades since 1979 and the rates of favourite countries that
UK
people
to travels in 1999. All in all,
people
who went and gone in England increased from 1979 until 1999
while
France and Spain were the favourite countries of
UK
residents.
According to
the line graph, in 1979 there was a high number of British in other countries around 12
million
people
. It was higher than
UK
visitors
with just under 10
million
people
. In the next decade,
UK
travelers
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three
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folded numbers
with
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30
million
people
,
while
tourists in the
UK
only doubled
with
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20
million
people
. By 1999, England's
visitors
had increased to almost 30 millions of
visitors
.
UK
tourists surged up to over 50
million
people
. Moving to the bar chart, in 1999, France was the most favourite destination country among
UK
residents with over 10
million
travellers. The next most popular country was Spain
by
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around 9
million
UK
visitors
. Meanwhile,
USA
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, Greece, and Turkey were the least famous
country
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countries
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visited by the British with less than 4
million
visitors
.
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