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You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter •describe the item •explain where and when you left it • say what action you would like the company to take Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows

#item #value #train #railway #company #•describe #•explain #action #addresses
Dear Sir or Madam, A very good day to you. I am writing regarding
for
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my lost item
in
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 the train
last
 day in the afternoon. The item that I left
in
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on
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 the
railways
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railway
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 is my wallet. The wallet is black in
color
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 with the
of
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brand Michael Kors
as well as
 it is medium rectangular with a zipper outside for the coin pears.
Moreover
, the important is there like
license
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my license
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id
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ID
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as well as
 my credit card. Unfortunately, I don't know where is the specific area but I am
sitted
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sitting
 in the
girls
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girl's
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 area in the middle area of
train
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the train
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.
Moreover
, I
transfered
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transferred
sitted
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situated
 in the
the
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front around 1400H.
To conclude
, I am requesting
to
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your office to
checked
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 the
cctv
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CCTV
 cameras during
that
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 hours. I hope I will hear from you soon. Warm kind regards, Allan K
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coherence cohesion
Provide more detailed information about the lost item, such as the size and any distinguishing features.
coherence cohesion
Use a more formal and polite tone when addressing the railway company.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas into separate paragraphs for clarity.
coherence cohesion
Include specific details about the time and location where the item was lost.
task achievement
Expand on the action you would like the company to take, such as contacting you if the item is found.
lexical resource
Use more varied and precise vocabulary to enhance your writing.
grammatical range
Check your sentence structure and grammar for errors.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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