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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided table compares the
amount
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 of
funds
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 allocated to
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Police
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the Police
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 from
National
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the National
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Government
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, Local Taxes and other sources,
while
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 the pie charts compare diverse fields including salaries, technology,
building
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buildings
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 and transport that the
funds
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 were spent on In a particular area in the King Dome in 2017 and 2018.
It is clear that
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 the main source of
funds
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 for the
police
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 budget was
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the
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National
Government
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.
Also
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,
considerable
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a considerable
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amount
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 of that money was allocated for paying the officers' and staff's remuneration.
National
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The National
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Government
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 was the main financial supporter of the
police
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, which presented 175.5
million
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 in 2017 and 177.8
million
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 in 2018.
Also
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,the investment dedicated to the
police
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 from Local Taxes was half of the total
amount
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 of National
Government
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 help in 2017 (91.2
million
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)
that
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which
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 reached
to
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apply
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102.3
million
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 in 2018.
In contrast
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, other sources like grants played a negligible role in supporting the
police
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. Notably,
the
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a
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 significant
amount
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 of the
funds
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were
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was
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 dedicated to
pay
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paying
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 employees' salaries in both years, which was about
two third
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two-thirds
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 of the total
amount
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.
Furthermore
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, in both years 17% of the budget
dedicated
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was dedicated
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 to the construction of buildings and communication
network
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networks
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. Significantly, 6% of the spent
funds
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to
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on
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 salaries in 2017,
replaced
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were replaced
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for
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by
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 the improvement of
the
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apply
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technology, which Reached
to
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apply
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14% in 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, funds, police, government, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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