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The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The scheme illustrates the process of the production of
glass
Use synonyms
 containers.
Overall
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, the nine main steps are followed during the process from starting with heating the pre-products to the
seperation
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separation
 phase. First and foremost, precursor
glass
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 surplus
melted
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is melted
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 in a big oven called
furnace
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a furnace
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 at 105
celcius
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Celcius
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. After the meltdown
completed
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is completed
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, the hot
glass
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pressed
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is pressed
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 by
a special machinery
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special machinery
a piece of special machinery
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 in a mould. Conducting an appropriate pressure by press machine,
this
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 process gives the special shape
of
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to
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container's
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the container's
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 thick wall. Eventually, a pressed
glass
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container
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confronted
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was confronted
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 with air for a
while
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. After
an
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apply
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enough air conduction,
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container
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the container
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 met with
kiln
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a kiln
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approximately
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of approximately
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 482
celcius
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celsius
; meanwhile, extreme heat alters the structure of the
glass
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container
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. After exposure
of
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to
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 high degrees,
cooling
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the cooling
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 phase is started in the kiln
about
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for about
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 60 minutes at 25 degrees.
Thefore
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Therefore
,
labours
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labourers
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 have to check every single
glass
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containers
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container
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 before packaging.
As a result
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,
malfactured
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manufactured
 products
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are seperated
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seperated
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separated
 by labours to recycle,
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then
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and then
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 properly manufactured
glass
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 containers are packaged for distribution.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, container with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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