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The maps below show the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighbouring town, since 1962.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighbouring town, since 1962.
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The maps illustrate
the
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Meadowside
village
 and
Fonton
, a side-by-side town,
development
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 from 1962 until now.
Overall
, there were
biggest
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the biggest
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 transformations in both towns, the most noticeable was the development of
main
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road
 that connected those cities and increasing new buildings
such
 as
sport centre
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sports centres
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,
hotel
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hotels
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,
station
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stations
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, business
park
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parks
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, etc. Back in 1962,
Meadowside
village
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Village
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 and
Fonton
 were separated by water. In
Meadowside
village
 there was only
small
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a small
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road
 which connected the
village
 to others,
while
 in
Fonton
 only had a railroad.
Moreover
, the growth started in 1985, in
Meadowside
village
 there
was
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 building developments,
such
 as
housing
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a housing
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 estate, leisure complex and
sport
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 centre.
In addition
, it had two main roads; the first
road
 connected the
village
 with the other, and
new
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the new
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 main
road
 that connected to
Fonton
.
In contrast
, in
Fonton
 there was not developed yet.
In nowadays
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Nowadays
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,
Meadowside
village
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Village
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 and
Fonton
 experienced significant development. The
most
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biggest
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 change is now both towns are connected by land. There are several new
facilitations
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facilities
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 that have been built, namely a hotel, station, and business park.
Additionally
, one railroad has been developed,
thus
 there are 2 railroads near
Fonton
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meadowside, village, fonton, road with synonyms.
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