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You recently stayed at a hotel for a conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. Include • Where you stayed • What the problems were • How they can fix your complaints

#hotel #conference #company #room #management #complaints
Dear Manager, I am writing
this
 letter to bring your attention
on
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 certain
issues
 which
i
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I
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 have faced during my business visit
at
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 your hotel. I stayed in
a
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 executive suite
room
 which was booked by my company during our conference meeting in a hall downstairs. I had
a
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 worst experience
while
 staying in your facility. I got
harrased
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harassed
 by your hotel
staff
 for complaining about the food, as the items were
extreme
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 spicy. In return, the
staff
 stated that he
cannot
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 do anything about it and blamed me for that complaint.
Also
, the mini bar which
i
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 was offered in the
room
 was empty and I have notified the reception but no
further
 actions
made
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 by your
staff
. For the next time, please make to educate your
staff
 about greeting and solving customer's
issues
 rather
then
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 blaming the customer itself.
Moreover
, make sure to double-check the amenities that you are providing with the
room
,
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 because it was
high-end
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a high-end
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room
 and we expected
to
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it to
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 be the best. I
will
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 really appreciate
if
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 you
can
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 bring
out
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these
issues
 to your higher team and fix
it
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,
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 so that we don't face
same
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issues
 again. Yours faithfully, Shivank Jalhotra
Submitted by ishan1502ishan on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure a logical development of ideas and provide a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Improve the greeting and closing of the letter to make it more professional and polite.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea and maintain coherence throughout the letter.
task achievement
Address all the points mentioned in the prompt to demonstrate a complete response.
task achievement
Maintain a formal and appropriate tone throughout the letter.
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