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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam, You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter with regard to the brochure advertisement
of
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walking
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a walking
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 tour in the Rishikesh mountains. I believe,
such
 travel opportunities
does
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 not come often and as a person who likes to explore the different parts of
world
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the world
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, it is a good chance.
This
 tour will allow me to connect with
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the nature
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nature
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 beauty
these
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 mountains and
its
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scenary
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scenery
 offers.
In addition
,
this
 tour will help me with my college assignment which includes the study
on
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 different mountains and landscapes. Another thing is, I was not able to find any
further
 details on
this
 trip. I would appreciate it if you could provide me with dates when
this
 trip is scheduled and the cost associated with it. I would
also
 like to inform you
on
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 my recent accident which
cause
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fracture
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a fracture
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 to my left hand. I would like to know if
this
 trip
have
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 any stage which
concern
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this
 fitness issue for me. I am worried
with
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this
 problem in
term
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 of my fitness level. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Kunj Soni
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task response
Include more specific details about why you are interested in the tour. What aspects of the mountains and scenery attract you?
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas more effectively. Each paragraph should have a clear focus and develop one main idea.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use more varied and precise language to express your ideas.
grammatical range
Pay more attention to sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity and accuracy.
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