You have bought a new mobile phone and in a few days of purchase, it has stopped working. You have spoken to the company representative a week ago but it has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, introduce yourself explain the situation say what action you would like the company to take

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Dear

sir

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Sir

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madam

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Madam

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, I am writing

you

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to you

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to express my strong dissatisfaction with a new iPhone mobile

phone

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which I purchased two weeks ago from your main company.

Actually

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I am currently studying

mobilography

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biography

. My teacher said that I should have the latest model

phone

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so that I can make a lot of

contents

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and videos effectively.

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this

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reason, I

decide

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to purchase the best

phone

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from your company as I heard that your quality is very good. Unfortunately, I was very disappointed after discovering that the product

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was

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defective

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apply

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one

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. The issue with the

phone

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is that I am unable to start it even after the

phone

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is fully charged. And

also

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what made me sad is that your saleswoman assured me to buy

this

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one

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because it is the best and latest model. I feel

myself

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deceived and in my opinion, it is disrespectful to customers. Despite my communication with

one

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of your representatives a week ago , nothing

have

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been done yet and I

seriously

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angry. As a solution and because I really need

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this

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phone

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, I am hoping that you will agree to replace it with a new

one

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immediately or I must ask you to refund the full cost price of

this

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product. And under the circumstances, I feel that an apology should be offered.

Then

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I look forward to your that you will pay attention to

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points that I have raised very carefully within

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two days,

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otherwise

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I will be forced to connect with the Bureau of Customer Protection. Yours faithfully, Durdona

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task response

Make sure to address all the points mentioned in the prompt, including introducing yourself and explaining the situation fully.

coherence cohesion

Organize your ideas more coherently by using paragraphs to separate each main point.

lexical resource

Vary your vocabulary and consider using more formal language to enhance your lexical resource.

grammatical range

Pay attention to your sentence structure and aim for more complex sentence constructions to improve your grammatical range.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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5
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

264 words

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