Scientific research should be the responsibility of government rather than commercial organisations. Do you agree?

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Scientific research is considered the most essential part of our developing world and where the funds should come from is becoming an ongoing debate in recent years. Some people believe that

governments

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should be responsible for the

foundation

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but I

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believe that the incentives from commercial

organisations

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would be

benefitial

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beneficial

. In

this

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essay, I will explain why commercial

organisation’s

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organisations’

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participation is important and give reasons for these

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organisations

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economic support . Scientific

researches

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research

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require

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requires

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strong

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a strong

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financial

foundation

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for affording

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to afford

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spesific equipments

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specific equipment

, high-tech computers and salaries

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for

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researchers.

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foundation

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should be provided by

governments

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in order to

incentive

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incentivise

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scientists and build

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a successfull

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successfull

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successful

country in the long term.

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, many

experiments

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can not

contuniue

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continue

or even can not start.

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, as long as

governments

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became the only source of

foundation

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this

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may lead to insufficient

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apply

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income

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for

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experiments

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. Since the budget

is restrain

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is restrained

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, the proportion, which

governments

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decide to ensure for

researches

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could be insufficient.

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, with only one resource of

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foundation

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foundation,

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the results of

experiments

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may seem skewed. For these reasons,

participation

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the participation

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of commercial

organisations

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is crucial, not only

rising

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raising

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the financial

foundation

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but

also

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providing

objective

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an objective

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atmosphere which is considered

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apply

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a fundamental part of any research. In

conclusiton

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conclusion

, I disagree

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notion that scientific research should be the responsibility of policymakers rather than commercial

organisations

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. I, personally, believe that the truth lies in between. It would be more effective

that

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commercial

organisations

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are

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were

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allowed to support

experiments

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but under

government’s

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the government’s

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supervisions

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supervision

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collaboration may help to ensure

impartial

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an impartial

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atmosphere with

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a more

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strong financial

foundation

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for scientific

researches

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coherence cohesion

Ensure a clear and logical organization of ideas throughout your essay.

lexical resource

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grammatical range

Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

262 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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