Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. So, sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

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Nowadays, sugary
food
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has
been
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become
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popular because it has some demand in the market.
Food
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and beverages, which include large
amount
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amounts
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of
sugar
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are produced by many
manufactures
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manufacturers
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but they promote many
diseases
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, so there is an argument that sugary products should be
high
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highly
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expensive to reduce
people
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's buying. I agree with
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statement and
this
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essay will discuss reasons for that view.
Frstly
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,
although
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unhealthy
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food's
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food
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price
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is rocketed, some
people
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consume
that products
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that product
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, because they have
lack
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a lack
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of awareness about
effects
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the effects
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of
suger
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sugar
involvement in the body.
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, there
a
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drink named Srinke
concludes
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that contains
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80% of
sugar
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and its selling cost was increased as
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
announcement
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,
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however
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however,
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society still has been consuming
its
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it
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significantly. One consumer said that he
has
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was
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addicted after
to
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apply
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that drink and
does
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did
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not know
complications
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the complications
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after drinking more
sugar
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, after educating him, he terminated
buying
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from buying
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carbonated-sugary drinks.
Morover
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Moreover
, authorities should educate
people
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about
sugar
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-combined
diseases
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,
itke
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like
diabetes, heart
diseases
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and obesity, with concern about unit
price
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,
then
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costermers
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customers
avoid consuming processed
food
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successfully.
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,if sugary
food
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is cheap,
people
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will select that
items
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item
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among other healthy
production
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products
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.
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,
people
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compair
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compare
the
price
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of goods rather
that
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than
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its quality and quantity. So, they refuse
choosing
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to choose
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expensive products because of select other alternatives. Another way, they are prone to consume healthy
food
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as
fress
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fresh
, unprocessed
food
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is relatively low cost. For
examples
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example
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, fresh
vegitables
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vegetables
and fruits could be
low budget
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. One example is after
soared
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Coca Cola
price
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,
people
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did not select it day drink or
fuctions
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functions
and
majority
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a majority
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of that's buyers
would buy
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bought
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fruits and make juice as an alternative
dink
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drink
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Finally
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they were avoided from health risk and promoted good habits which irradicate more non-communicable
diseases
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in the future.
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that
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that,
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I agree with making expensive
sugar
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productions
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production
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because it leads to more benefits. In conclusion,
rate
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the rate
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of reporting
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food associated
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food-associated
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diseases
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has been growing for
few
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a few
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decades, which would diminish
with
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apply
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its market
values
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value
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.
High
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number of
people
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are
signicantly
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significantly
sensitive regarding
price
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variations of
food
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, so high cost motivates
people
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to consume low
sugary
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low-sugar
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diet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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