Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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technology influences the
education
field,
such
as the popularity of online learning. Currently, online learning is mushrooming everywhere and
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a pro and con. Some people believe that
this
type of
education
brings enormous benefits and will replace traditional
education
. Meanwhile, the rest of them claim that face-to-face learning is irreplaceable. In my opinion, e-learning is simple and easy to
access
, but
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replace face-to-face
education
because it can offer physical activities,
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to all places and
also
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more interactive. To
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with, online learning has
been existing
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since a couple of years ago, and
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became
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more popular when the pandemic of
covid-19
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COVID-19
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came, in 2020. In that year, almost all
students
in the world were forced to do the e-learning process to reduce the number of
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cases and it is becoming an alternative learning currently. Even though
now
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covid-19 has gone, online learning is still popular and many people tend to do that kind of learning
instead
of traditional one
due to
some advantages,
such
as
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to
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access
, simple and
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students
can do the learning process at home
as
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long as they have an internet
access
and gadget.
This
case is happening in all
education
fields, not only in formal but
also
non-formal
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in non-formal
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and informal
education
.
For example
, in English
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one of the English courses in the world, After
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covid-19, many parents ask to continue
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online learning rather than face-to-face because they stay in other cities where there
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no English
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access
in that city. They have a desire to give the best
education
for
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to
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their children but have limited
access
, so they believe that the e-learning process has numerous benefits for them.
However
, face-to-face learning has its own advantages which could not be replaced by e-learning. E-learning is easy to
access
but it happens only for those who have internet
access
and gadgets,
while
not every student has them, especially those who come from rural areas.
Moreover
, traditional
education
can offer physical activities and be more interactive than e-learning which can make the
students
more bound to each other, and
also
develop their other developments outside the knowledge of academic things.
Furthermore
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traditional learning, teachers have more chances to observe the ability of their
students
and the score given could be more accurate because the observation includes all student developments.
For instance
, when
pandemic
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the pandemic
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covid-19 was coming and school
activity
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activities
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should be delivered online, most teachers who thought in rural areas faced a hard time
to cope
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with that situation because all of the
students
did not have
proper
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technology and there was no internet
access
. So, the teacher went to each student's house, to give the material.
To sum up
, each type of learning has
their
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own benefits, either e-learning or traditional learning. Each person has their own perspective and choice to choose the best
education
for their children.
Nevertheless
, face-to-face learning has its own characteristic which cannot be replaced by e-learning.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-Learning
  • face-to-face education
  • remote learning
  • virtual classroom
  • webinar
  • digital platform
  • self-paced learning
  • interactive learning
  • course accessibility
  • academic networking
  • pedagogy
  • synchronous/asynchronous sessions
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • edtech (educational technology)
  • holistic development
  • practical skills
  • collaborative learning
  • digital divide
  • curriculum adaptation
  • technological literacy
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