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Write a letter to your college administration department complaining about the college facility. In your letter, include: what the problem is how this problem has affected you what the college should do to fix this problem You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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I am complaining about an inadequate facility in the institution. Since I enrolled in the University I have faced many difficulties. The main issue is room facilities are insufficient because the
water
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 filters are not properly cleaned.
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, the
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 is polluted and a funny smell from the
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 whenever I drink.
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, I got diagnosed with diarrhoea
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 time my doctor told me that I had drank liquid
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 which contained bacteria. A plethora of students have
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 from polluted
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 and it is an alarming situation.
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, I complained in the
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 month but did not rectify
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 problem.
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,
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 union have a plan to solve
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 problem and wants to share a suggestion. Kindly install a new filtration plant and
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 filters on a weekly basis.
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, if staff can clean the filtration area it will be possible to get the
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 clean. I am looking forward to hearing you again soon. Yours Faithfully,
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the letter follows a clear and logical structure with appropriate use of paragraphs.
lexical resource
Consider using more varied vocabulary to enhance the lexical resource of the letter.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to improve the grammatical range.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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