In achieving personal happiness, our relationships with family, friends, and colleagues are more important than work and wealth. Do you agree or disagree with this?

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personal

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is achievable by family bonds and

relationship

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relationships

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with

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and

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or by job and

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has drawn much attention from the public.

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it is true that

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are very important, I believe that

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and

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still play a vital role in personal

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.

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the one hand, strong

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with family,

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, and

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contribute significantly

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personal

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. The main reason for

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supportive and loving

relationships

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promote a sense of belonging and connection, owing to the fact that you never feel alone when you face challenges there

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someone

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can protect you. Even though building and maintaining strong

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require time, effort and communication,

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can count on family and

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friends

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presence during any hardship and

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time of their life.

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, having meaningful interaction with loved ones and

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can bring joy and fulfilment.

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, the contribution of

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and

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to

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personal

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is indispensable. To be more precise, as the world

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borderless,

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need

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a job

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money

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to keep up with the

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changes and afford new things that are needed for new life standards.

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, it is obvious that having

money

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can bring

everyone

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satisfaction.

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work

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and

wealth

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often involve stress and pressure which can negatively impact personal

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, without

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and

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the situation

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even worse. In conclusion,

relationships

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with family and

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and

colleagues

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,

as well as

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work

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and

wealth

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, both have a positive influence on personal

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;

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,

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should hold a balance between

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them

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for the optimum benefits.