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you should spend 20 minutes on this task. the diagram below shows the process of making violin by hand. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and mae comparsion where relevant. write at least 150 words.

you should spend 20 minutes on this task. the diagram below shows the process of making violin by hand. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and mae comparsion where relevant. write at least 150 words.
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The given diagram delineates the information related to the procedure for constructing a
violin
 which is handmade. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that eight steps are involved in making
violin
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a violin
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 and
the
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apply
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thin wood is used. To initiate the process,
the
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a
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 thin piece of wood was taken, which was
cutted
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cut
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in
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into
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 a
particluar
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particular
 shape with the help of
saw
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a saw
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, two parts were formed
that
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which
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 were
front
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the front
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 and back
part
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parts
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. In
front
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the front
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part
, with the help of
cutting
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a cutting
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 tool, the f-hole was made on
right
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the right
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 and left
side
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sides
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. A bass bar was attached in the middle of
front
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the front
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part
 by the glue. Some unshaped rib strips were taken and
molded
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moulded
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 into different shapes by using the heating tool. These shaped ribs were
adjuncted
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adjusted
adjunct
 to
inside
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the inside
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 of the back
part
 by using glue and
then
front
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a front
the front
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part
 was jointed. The body of
violin
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the violin
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 was
jointed
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joined
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 to
neck
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the neck
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 of
scroll
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the scroll
a scroll
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 to form an assembled
violin
 and additional parts
were
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was
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 added and varnished by some liquid.
This
 forms a complete
violin
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words violin, front, part with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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