One of your colleagues is leaving for a new job, and your manager has asked you to arrange a farewell party for him/her. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, •suggest a suitable date and time for the party • recommend a place • discuss the food and entertainment options that should be available

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Dear sir, I am writing you

this

letter to inform you about the details in

regards

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to the farewell party for our teammate Qusai which you requested me to organize. Qusai is leaving our company on the 3rd of

july

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July

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. I am planning a picnic party

this

weekend if you don't mind. I thought that it would be a great opportunity to celebrate

as well as

get to know each other more as a team. we will start to gather around

12:00

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12.00

pm in the company parking lot, after that, I arranged for us a minibus to take us to the lake where the party will take place. Upon our arrival to the lake, there will be waiting for us the catering company for food and drinks

as well as

desserts. Me and other team members

also

arrange a bunch of fun activities to do. I believe it will be a memorable get-together and if you want to change or add anything or give me suggestions, please feel free to reply at your earliest convenience. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, YM

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coherence cohesion

Clearly state the suggested date and time for the party.

coherence cohesion

Provide specific recommendations for a suitable place.

coherence cohesion

Give more details and options for food and entertainment choices.

coherence cohesion

Address the manager in a more formal and respectful way.

task achievement

Ensure there is a clear and complete response to all the points in the task prompt.

lexical resource

Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the overall lexical resource.

grammatical range

Improve the grammatical range by using a variety of complex sentence structures.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

189 words

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