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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates information about British
emigration
 (
Australia
, Spain,
new zealand
Correct your spelling
New Zealand
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, the USA and France) to the destination selected for four years.
Overall
, we can see that
Australia
 has the highest
emigration
 in the Periods 2004 to 2007.
In contrast
, the highest
Number
 of people who
emigration arrived
Wrong verb form
emigrated
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 from
Australia
 was above 40000.
While
,
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apply
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in
Change preposition
apply
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New Zealand has
lowest
Change the article
the lowest
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Number
 around 20000 in 2004.
In addition
 in
2005
Add a comma
2005,
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 the
number
 of people
arrived
Correct pronoun usage
who arrived
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 in
Australia
less
Add a missing verb
was less
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 than 40000.
In
Change preposition
On
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 opposite
there
Correct your spelling
other
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 was
a
Correct article usage
the
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Numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
Number
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of
emigration
 to
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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lowest
Add a missing verb
was lowest
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 in 2005.
On the other
hand
Add a comma
hand,
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Australia
has
Wrong verb form
had
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 the highest
Number
Fix capitalization
number
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 in 2006 it reached above 50000 for
emigration
whereas
 New Zealand has the lowest
Number
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words emigration, australia, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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