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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates information about British
emigration
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Australia
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, Spain,
new zealand
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New Zealand
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, the USA and France) to the destination selected for four years.
Overall
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, we can see that
Australia
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 has the highest
emigration
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 in the Periods 2004 to 2007.
In contrast
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, the highest
Number
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 of people who
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emigration arrived
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emigrated
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 from
Australia
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 was above 40000.
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,
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apply
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in
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apply
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New Zealand has
lowest
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the lowest
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Number
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 around 20000 in 2004.
In addition
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 in
2005
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2005,
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 the
number
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 of people
arrived
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who arrived
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 in
Australia
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less
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was less
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 than 40000.
In
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On
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 opposite
there
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other
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 was
a
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the
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Numbers
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Number
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of
emigration
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 to
USA
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the USA
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lowest
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was lowest
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 in 2005.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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Australia
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has
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had
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 the highest
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Number
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number
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 in 2006 it reached above 50000 for
emigration
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whereas
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 New Zealand has the lowest
Number
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words emigration, australia, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emigration
  • migrate
  • destination
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • spike
  • drop
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • stable
  • consistent
  • overview
  • summarize
  • highlight
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