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In some countries, health care and education are only partially funded by the government. Some people argue that the government should be responsible for covering the full cost of these services. Do you support or oppose the opinion? Explain your position.

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There is no doubt that government should
support
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the heath
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heath
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health
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 and
education
 of the people.
While
 some people believe that
education
 and health should provided free of cost by the government,
but
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others argue that the authority
need
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 to
support
 partially only. In
this
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 I will explain my
support
 for the former view.
Education
 and
heathcare
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healthcare
 are vital areas for
a
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the
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well being
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well-being
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 of a community. A healthy and
well educated
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 people can only uplift the
socity
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society
 and the country,
therefore
, it should be reached all
the
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levels of
the
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society. For
exmaple
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example
, different
level
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levels
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 of
education
 based on the financial status of the parents will segregate the students and
adversly
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adversely
effect
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affect
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the
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social justice.
Although
 it is a huge responsibility, it should be handled by the authority.
Additionally
, the government should have full control over these sectors to ensure that
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the intented
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intented
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intended
 quality of services
are
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 provided. The private sector might look for
economical
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 aspects rather than social service.
For instance
, the health care quality
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is
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different based on the institutions. but there
are
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is
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 uniformity among the
goverment
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government
 institutions to keep
minimum
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the minimum
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 quality. In conclusion, the
goverment
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government
have
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has
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quite
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 responsibility to provide
the
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support
 for health and
education
 for
citizans
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citizens
 to ensure
the
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that
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 it
is reached
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 all levels of the community.
Moreover
, the authority can provide
uniform
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a uniform
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 standard of services to
public
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the public
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.
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