In some countries, health care and education are only partially funded by the government. Some people argue that the government should be responsible for covering the full cost of these services. Do you support or oppose the opinion? Explain your position.

There is no doubt that government should
support
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the heath
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heath
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health
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and
education
of the people.
While
some people believe that
education
and health should provided free of cost by the government,
but
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others argue that the authority
need
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to
support
partially only. In
this
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I will explain my
support
for the former view.
Education
and
heathcare
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healthcare
are vital areas for
a
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the
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well being
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well-being
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of a community. A healthy and
well educated
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people can only uplift the
socity
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society
and the country,
therefore
, it should be reached all
the
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levels of
the
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society. For
exmaple
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example
, different
level
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levels
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of
education
based on the financial status of the parents will segregate the students and
adversly
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adversely
effect
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affect
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the
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social justice.
Although
it is a huge responsibility, it should be handled by the authority.
Additionally
, the government should have full control over these sectors to ensure that
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the intented
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intented
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intended
quality of services
are
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provided. The private sector might look for
economical
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aspects rather than social service.
For instance
, the health care quality
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is
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different based on the institutions. but there
are
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is
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uniformity among the
goverment
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government
institutions to keep
minimum
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the minimum
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quality. In conclusion, the
goverment
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government
have
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quite
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responsibility to provide
the
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support
for health and
education
for
citizans
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citizens
to ensure
the
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it
is reached
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all levels of the community.
Moreover
, the authority can provide
uniform
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a uniform
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standard of services to
public
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the public
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.
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