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the contribution of various Economic sectors to Xcountry gross domestic product in 2016 , 2017 and 2018 .

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the table gives information about Economic sectors in different three products agriculture , industry and
service
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 for three years .
overall
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, the highest rate in year two thousand and sixteen was
service
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,
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 the lowest rate was agriculture .
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 , industry increased in two thousand and eighteen ,
while
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service
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 decreased in the same year . the details illustrate
,
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apply
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service
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that service
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 was the highest one in 2016 ,at 65% ,
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 agriculture was the lowest one in the same period about 13% .
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, the percentage of industry was 22% .
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