The two maps below show the village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024.

The two maps below show the village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024.
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The graphs illustrate the Bunborough
village
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in existing time and
future
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plans for the small town in 2024.
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, in the
future
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empty areas will be used to build different buildings. One of the farms will be redesigned to be
poultry
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a poultry
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farm
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instead
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of
regular
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a regular
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farm
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. The
village
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store will close and
supermarket
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a supermarket
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might open in the
future
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. In the present day, the majority of the
village
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area is empty.
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, the
future
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plan
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plans
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plan
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is
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are
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to replace these empty areas with
different
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a different
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purposes
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purpose
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purposes
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such
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as the community soccer field near the farms and
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the supermarket
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supermarket
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the supermarket
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near the cooperative bank. In the
future
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, the
farm
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near the main road will be
poultry
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a poultry
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farm
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instead
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of
regular
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a regular
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farm
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.
Additionally
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, the
village
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store will close and the employment assistance building
takes
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over next to the prayer centre.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words village, future, farm with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • maps
  • village
  • present day
  • plans
  • 2024
  • overview
  • key differences
  • road network
  • infrastructure
  • residential areas
  • recreational spaces
  • impact
  • environment
  • benefits
  • challenges
  • proposed changes
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