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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided table and charts illustrate the information about the police cost in one area of Britain, from 2017 to 2018.
While
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 the table shows the source of money came from, the charts indicate how it was shared. With regards to
police
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 budget, the highest cost was in the national government sources both in 2017 and 2018 at 175.5 and 177.8 million respectively.
In contrast
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, the other resources (eg grants)
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in
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 the lowest at 38 million in 2017 and it
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slightly increased
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 just 38.5 million in 2018. In 2017, the money was spent the most
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 salaries (officers and staff) at 75%, and it
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decreased
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 69% in the next year.
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, the cost
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spent
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the
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lower, in 2017 and 2018, at just 8% and 14% respectively.
Additionally
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, the buildings and transport were spent at the same percentage at 17% in the period given.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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